Watching your video to me it felt more like a video ad or something that I would have seen on Black Diamond Hummer Tours website than anything else. I didn't finish the video thinking "what a story, what a ride!"
I wanted to feel what the tour was like not just from outside the Hummer but inside as well. I would have loved to have been take on a ride with a group so you could get the enjoying the ride, the uneasiness in their face as they go over a big rock in the Hummer, natural sound of screams, fear, roller coaster type oohhs and ahhhs, the sound of the Hummer etc.
It was lots of narration from you and a bit from that driver but talking with people who just finished a tour would have been good.
You want your video to make me do two things, feel like I'm part of that tour and also at the end of your video for me to say to myself "I've got to do that when I'm in the Southwest."
Natural sound would have been really nice for this piece in addition to the other things I mentioned. The crunch of the rocks, the rattles and other noises of the Hummer suspension etc.
The music in the piece didn't add anything
I know it was your first attempt at a travel feature just remember in the future to always aim to make it memorable, informative and fun to watch.
Good luck and keep posting other videos you do on here, we all learn a lot from each other :-)
Thanks, Eric. I will keep your advice in mind as I edit my next piece.
Cool man, hope I helped :-)
If you haven't do so yet I'd totally recommend check out several other videos on here and reading the comments on them. Some are really constructive and helpful.
I have been watching every video posted and reading all of the comments. One of the best ways to learn. The other is to have your work ripped apart piece by piece. I'm just getting my start, so a site like this is great because it allows me to pick the brains of the pros.
I totally agree with you Evan :-)
I've been shooting video for about two years, still learning a lot and this site really helps.
Looking forward to your next piece.