Great edit! Those short comments from swimmers work very well. None of the others shots were held too long. This story is essentially about how exercise is good for you. You don't drag it out. Does it capture the theme? I didn't feel like I'd learned about a meal, but who cares? My biggest critique is the first blast of sound on the exterior of the building--WAY too loud. Fade in all opening audio. I think of it like waking up--opening eyes and ears to what is about to unfold. It better have a very good reason to slap me in the face to wake me up. Overall, it is tough to record ever changing sound. That is why the pros have sound people on shoots. Auto levels settings can work in extreme situations, but are not usually advised. You have a Beachtek on your little video camera, that should help, but you still need to set the levels on the camera first, then adjust with the Beachtek. Doing that while shooting, on deadline, is pretty hard to remember.