Contesting an Election: Lawbreaker to Lawmaker (view this story)

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Peter Huoppi May 11, 2010, 10 a.m. permalink

Video is a medium better suited to "showing" rather than "telling," but this piece told much more than it showed. This is the kind of story that I try to avoid, since there really isn't much to see, other than what your subjects look like.

Given what you had to work with, I think you did a fine job. The pacing of the editing and narration is good, but if I was an average viewer, I think I would have quickly lost interest and navigated away. I kept asking myself "why am I watching this?" Not because it was poorly done, but because there wasn't much to see.

This is a story about legal process, and required an awful lot of explanation. John Hirst seemed like a character I should be interested in, but in the end I wasn't. Maybe you could have refocused the story on him, and why this is such an important issue to him.

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Adam Westbrook May 11, 2010, 1:34 p.m. permalink

Thanks for the honest feedback Peter.
As you say this was a very difficult story to tell in pictures, and required a huge amount of technical legal information to be shoved into 5 minutes.
I personally was quite proud of the first couple of minutes, but it's easy to spot I ran out of images shortly after that.
Thanks again!

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Yang Xu May 12, 2010, 7:05 p.m. permalink

Good in images, good in story telling.
Which impreseed me most is the way you show the beginning of the story. The building you choose, and also the voice in the background. It's just perfect, and drove me to keep watching what will happen next!

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