Fish rescue near the Nile slide (view this story)

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Colin Mulvany April 25, 2010, 11:32 p.m. permalink

Nice job TJ for a three hour edit. There’s lots of information in this video. Not being from the area, the video was a somewhat confusing to me at first, especially with the text over the opening shot. You are asking the viewer to listen to the subject, while reading text and viewing the video. An opening text-only slide that defines what the story is about would be better. Why are they diverting the river? If I didn't read the intro text below the video, I would be totally lost. A news video like this should stand on it own and not rely on intro text or the print story to explain the big picture.

I know you were pressed for time, but one thing I really noticed with this video is that the narrative kind of rambles along. Not seeing the face of who is talking was confusing to me. A couple of times the narrators change without a nat sound break between them. It was jarring and took me out of the moment. I feel an objective voiceover would help the viewer understand what is going on in this story sooner. If you introduce the characters, I would be more connected to who they are and what they are doing.

The video looks good and is paced well. I would have liked to see a bit more variety in the shots, especially close ups of faces would help. Example: At the end of the video, the guy scooting the fish out of the truck (action,) I wanted to see a tight shot of his face (reaction.)

Audio was clean, but I would like to hear more natural sound weaved between the subject’s narration to break it up some.

As for whether or not it was ok to tell just that day's story, my answer is yes. You tell a story the best you can under the deadlines you’re given.

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