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Colin Mulvany May 13, 2010, 10:43 p.m. permalink

Well-done David! I like the way you went back and forth between the guy and the girl interviews. It helps move the narrative along.

When doing more than one interview for a story, remember to mix up the composition, where one subject is on the left looking into the frame and the other is on the right looking in.

Also, when shooting a long interview, try to mix up your focal lengths by shooting some normal shots of the subject, then pull out for a loose shot and then later go in tight on the face. That way each time you show the subject in your video, you will have some visual variety. Don’t be afraid to experiment with the interview composition by doing something totally off the wall. With a wireless mic, you can place the camera anywhere you like. Try off to the side for part of an interview.

The one thing that I really wanted to hear is some live interaction between the subjects while they were balancing on the strap. Just some short bursts of them bantering or laughing between themselves. I saw it on the video, but I want to hear it.

The formal interviews make up the entire narrative. I think it would have been better to weave some more natural sound breaks between the interviews. You do some small nat sound pops, but I felt the story needed more.

Finally don’t forget to try some long telephoto shots. These are great for visual variety. I didn’t see many here. You did do well with the tight shots though, and I particularly liked the camera following the feet shot.

Good story, told well.

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David Brooks May 14, 2010, 2:06 p.m. permalink

Colin-

I sincerely appreciate the time you took to watch and critique the video and I believe all your points would improve it.

I do have a set of wireless mic's and I'm not sure why I didn't bring them on this assignment. And It never occurred to me to have a wireless mic on them while on the line, what a great idea! I think that would have helped tremendously.

Thanks again for your insights, I will definitely incorporate them in my next project.

David

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Brian Immel May 15, 2010, 11:01 a.m. permalink

David, I was never bored. Your visual variety and story progression kept it interesting throughout.

Watching it a second time, I wanted that initial shot to be more of a draw though. One way to start would be to remove that VO of "we're flash slacking" and start with the woman's VO ..'put it up quick...". I think that could build some initial curiosity in which you can slowly build the story up from there.

Overall though I did like the story progression. I know nothing about Flash Slacking (always wondered though), but from the initial setup all the way to the tricks at the end I feel you've captured a good deal of it.

I agree with Colin on the audio on the line. Even a few "ohhs" and "ahhs" on the line could be a nice mix between all the talking. The interviews tell me a lot about what they think of Flash Slacking, but hearing their reactions on the line may give a better sense of how they feel about it.

Great work!

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