Jerry Stiller Unscripted (view this story)

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Peter Huoppi Aug. 25, 2010, 9:33 a.m. permalink

You've got quite the unique story here. I commend you calling the audible here and capturing the unplanned story. What I think this needs, though, is a lot more polish. At eight minutes, it's rather long. The text tease and the fact that I'm a big Seinfeld fan kept me watching, but I think you need to get to that climactic moment of him ringing the doorbell a lot sooner. Four minutes is too long to get to that point.

His reflections on the show are somewhat interesting, but that's not really the story here. I would trim the opening four minutes to something very brief, under a minute, with perhaps one good quote. Just enough to set the scene for the real action.

Then once we're in the house, you have several nice moments between Mr. Stiller and the couple, but it's very clumsy and sometimes slow as we get from one to the other. I would have liked to have heard directly from Mr. and Mrs. Lopipero. Some quick quotes from interviews with them would have moved the story along.

I think the best part of this video is the ending. I would have cut a little bit at the beginning of his last quote, but other than that you have a nice reflective quote from him and a nice series of images, of the Lopiperos and the view from the car as it pulls away. The story would have kept my attention more if you could have kept this kind of pace in the rest of the edit.

To me, one of the hardest types of stories to shoot is where you have one subject doing one thing. In this case your subject is riding in a car and visiting a house. It's tremendously difficult to come up with a nice variety of visuals to keep a good pace in the editing and to avoid jump cuts.

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Eric Seals Aug. 25, 2010, 1:03 p.m. permalink

What a surprise of a story and I think with some really good and tight editing you could have a fun story here.


I agree with Peter 8 minutes is way to long for this.

Technically there is a lot of camera movement (not smooth enough or fluid), walking shots, fast zooms and exposure issues. Stuff like that usually stop me but because of the subject and I wanted to review this I kept going. I see that you're getting rid of the JVC. I don't know much about that camera at but make sure to nail these things down good with whatever camera you end up getting.  Be sure to go on the FtF forum and ask around about the best cameras to get if it's not to late or if you already bought one let the forum know, might be others on here that use the same camera and can help to get to know your new gear.

I think to start this video a minute or less of Jerry at the beginning talking and building up to going up to the house would help and with that I'm not a big fan of him talking in the cab for 3 minutes with the blown out windows and lots of camera shake. 
If there was time even for 15 minutes to interview him in a room on a tripod with good light and framing before going to the Costanza house that would have been great instead. Add his audio under some of the b-roll like you had (him getting in the taxi, wide, tight, driving past homes, getting out of taxi) 

Making this less than a minute gets us to the best part that you have going to the home.

Such a surprise on the porch and watching it the first time I was really hoping someone would open that door and glad they eventually did. But after that when Jerry was invited in it did become slow, technically not there, just conversations that went nowhere and seemed a bit awkward at times. I agree with what Peter said about hearing from the couple that own the Costanza house.

Eric





Drew Stephens Aug. 26, 2010, 7:41 a.m. permalink

the purple knitting thing was my fav part.

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Julia Xanthos Aug. 27, 2010, 8:23 a.m. permalink

Thank you so much for the feedback. Please refer to this link when trying to view the video. Thank you


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JHtO-4dBSYA

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