Poems for All - Richard Hansen (view this story)

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Colin Mulvany July 1, 2012, 8:59 p.m. permalink

Andrew, nicely done. This is an excellent story edit. It's interesting, when I watched it a second time, I realized how much the visual story was being told through tight and super tight shots. They really bring Richard, the bookstore owner's narrative to life. You keep the visuals moving at the right pace for this simple profile. Your audio is excellent and I love the framing on Richard face. It feels like I can reach out and touch his beard. Got to love these 5d MkII files.

 
I'm not always a fan of music in a story, but in this case I wondered if you considered using some? There is a sense on whimsy in this story that I think could be brought out more with a light music bed. 
I like how you worked in the natural sound of the paper cutter and the stapler natural sound pops between Richard's thoughts, it is something that not a lot of producers do enough. It really helps break up the narrative--if only for a few seconds.
 
Finally, the sequence of the cards that Richard designed seemed a bit small to see all the details. Maybe just increasing the frame size 25% would give it more impact for the viewer.
 
Keep up the great work,

Colin 

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John Harte July 2, 2012, 5:32 p.m. permalink

Beautiful piece, Andrew!

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Andrew Nixon July 5, 2012, 1:23 p.m. permalink

Thanks, guys!  I was really excited to do this, as he was a relatively private guy, and he has a very unique project.  It's nice to do a story that is a bit whimsical, but with some substance as well.


I thought about music, but I felt that there is a rhythm to the ambient sounds that I feel would conflict with whatever tempo the music would be. As for the cards, I agree.  They were full-res, but I could have blown them up in photoshop maybe so it wouldn't be as pixelated at Final Cut.

I hope to find more people like him.

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