'Precious Moments' (view this story)

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Michael Rosenblum June 25, 2010, 4:18 a.m. permalink

Just a beautiful piece. The photography is stunning and the marriage of the voices and nat sounds (very important) makes the whole thing hang together as a very compelling whole. Congrats. Love it.

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Curt Chandler June 25, 2010, 8:19 a.m. permalink

Nicely structured story. I like the way you cycle between husband and wife to craft the narrative. The family singing in harmony as a closer is brilliant. Two suggestions: One, the opening nat sound is a little mushy, The story starts with dead air, then there's an indistinct sound, then we can clearly hear the door slide/horse whinny/greeting. The piece would have more energy at the beginning if the the door slide/horse whinny/greeting nat started earlier. Second, I was wondering what process the man goes through to regain control once he starts to feel angry. The answer may be too long to incorporate here (I think the length is good), but it would be worth asking.

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