Remembering Pvt. Steven Drees (view this story)

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Peter Huoppi May 24, 2010, 7:06 p.m. permalink

Michael: This is pretty solid for a piece of daily work. I think you're right, though, about tightening it up a bit. I wanted to see more of the gathering to welcome the family. Could we have seen how they reacted? Also, I think it took too long to get to the "action" of the video. If you could have trimmed down the introductory interviews, we could have gotten there quicker.

You had great emotion in the interviews, so I would have emphasized that rather than the more light-hearted stuff - he was great, everybody liked him, etc. When you get that emotional response from your subject, it gets me to connect emotionally, too. The video doesn't need to tell the blow by blow story of when an where he was injured, when and where he died, where the family traveled, so I would try to avoid the text screens. If I want to read, I'll read the story in the paper.

To me, the music didn't fit. I think you're better off with something composed specifically for the piece or with nothing rather than something general from a royalty-free library. You had plenty of good quotes and images, I don't think you needed the music.

You've got all the parts for a good story, I just think you need to get me to the key parts quicker.

A few technical notes. I don't like the camera angles looking down at the subject. I see what you're trying to do with the background, but it makes it harder to connect. Closer to eye level would be better. Also, after you've started with that wider interview shot, come in closer on her for the more emotional moments. It looks like you didn't de-interlace the video. Make sure the video is deinterlaced or progressive when you're publishing to the web. It was particularly noticeable when the flags were blowing.

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