The one day middle Georgia bear season (view this story)

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Colin Mulvany Feb. 9, 2014, 10:14 p.m. permalink

Grant, Thanks for sharing your video on Finding the Frame.
I think this story works fine as a stand alone narrative, but I find it lacks context. I kept asking myself "what's this story about"? If you could have included a better opening interview, it would have helped me understand the story you wanted to tell. The write out under the video would have worked if it was incorporated into the video either through a voice over or pulling it out of one of your academic subjects.

The simply question: "Tell me what's going on here today," is one I always ask. So many times I get gold from that open-ended question.

When you produce a piece like this, it's so important to know the story you want to tell. And it is best to keep in mind the viewers of your story. If they come to the video first without reading the print story, will they understand what is going on in the video? Do you answer the questions they might have? A story like this does not need to be long. It just needs to be defined and efficient in its storytelling. 

A couple of technical things: 

Work on a better lower thirds title presentation. The gray bar running all the way across the screen is distracting, Most times I just use text with a drop shadow to separate it from the video. I like to make the top text bold and the bottom normal. Arial font is a good one to start with.

Spit your audio so that you do not have abrupt edits. Use cross fades on the audio so that it fades under the upcoming clip.  Your edits points  should be as smooth as butter. 

More sequencing. That means shooting wide, medium, tight, and super tight shots and editing those together. The more tight shots the better. They make excellent transitions in your story.  

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Grant Blankenship Feb. 10, 2014, 6:02 a.m. permalink


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Grant Blankenship Feb. 10, 2014, 6:07 a.m. permalink

Thanks, Colin.


I agree that this one is lacking in context if you are not coming from the the written text. I might go back and re-edit with a voiceover or brief text block to contextualize it.

I take your point, too, about the chopping carrots/frame sequencing. I'll think harder about mixing that up to keep viewers engaged.

Smooth as butter with the sound. Yes, that's the goal. 

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