The Song Poet (view this story)

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Colin Mulvany May 1, 2010, 10:50 p.m. permalink

Michael,
This video shows growth in your editing and storytelling. This will make a nice series of videos over time. The key is to make each one fresh. I liked what your subject has to say about his song writing, but after about five minutes my interest started to fade. I think you could tighten up the narrative a lot here and not lose much. You need to wrap up his thought process sooner.

It felt like you were running out of decent B-roll to cover your A-roll edits toward the end.

The one thing I was glad to see you do was the change up your focal length when cutting back to the poet during the interview at the coffee shop. That really helped give some visual variety to the edit. Going in close worked well when the poet was contemplative. You have lots of tight shots, but I would think about shooting the super-tight shot. Show me the tips of his fingers on the guitar chords etc.

Loved the rim lit shot at the end. It would have made a cool still photo…

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Michael Fagans May 3, 2010, 2:26 p.m. permalink

Colin:

Thanks for the critique.

It always comes down to cut, cut, cut doesn't it.

Knowing that the five minute mark had you starting to fade, what sections or things that he was talking about would you cut first or what didn't catch your imagination or seemed extra?

B-roll started to fade, ran into some issues with where he actually works on his music and lyrics.

Thanks.

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