Weleetka Killings: One year later (view this story)

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John O'Boyle May 25, 2010, 8:26 p.m. permalink

Adam,

This is my first time commenting on this site, hopefully you will find the comments useful.

You certainly feel the father's pain and anguish, not only at the loss of his daughter but in the fact that no suspect has been arrested.
You made the most of what appears to be one visit to the crime scene.
The interview is excellent.

I know you are less interested in technical feedback but I really have to mention those black flashes. You very successfully set a slow and moving pace that draws in the viewer but those abrupt black frames really jolt the viewer out of the story.
Same for that group of copy photos. The rapid pace of the photos does not mix well with the slow paced interview.
I still don't know what the girl looks like. Those copy photos are golden, don't waste them.

Why is William's name on the screen when somebody else is talking?
It's really confusing.

I hope these comments were helpful.
I look forward to the video when they catch the guy.

Thanks for posting.

John

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Adam Wisneski May 26, 2010, 8:39 a.m. permalink

Thanks for the review John. I see what you're saying about the hard cuts and flashing pictures. I think I'd probably do it different if I were to do it again.

The name thing is interesting. I just wanted to introduce who the guy was without burning any precious b roll. But I see what you're saying about it being confusing while the reporter is asking a question.

Thanks for your time John. I appreciate you.

A

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Kevin Wellenius May 29, 2010, 6:23 a.m. permalink

The piece is not boring. It has some nice surprises, like the care with which William keeps the roadside shrine, or how he talks to Skyler. I found that to be the most interesting part of the interview. His frustration about nobody speaking out has a nice resonance with your "no snitch culture" piece, and William's disappointment in folks who won't speak to the police about what they might know is palpable.

While conventional stories need an ending or a resolution, this one doesn't have one. The case is still unsolved, William is still in limbo feeling grief and a desire for justice, but with no idea if that will ever come. In a way, the story is all about living in that unresolved state, and this piece conveys it well.

k

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Kevin Wellenius May 29, 2010, 6:26 a.m. permalink

I misspelled the victim's name: Skyla, not Skyler.

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