Wrongfully Accused (view this story)

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Eric Seals June 29, 2010, 7:06 p.m. permalink

Glad to hear you are open to constructive criticism

For me a video should always make me care, understand, sympathize and connect with the subject or subject matter and this didn't do that for me.

It was just very average and it was covered like the presser that it was.

It really should be MUCH more. I wanted to care about all the work the students did, the struggle it was for him and how happy he is now that he is out and able to start his life over again.

I'm not sure what kind of access you could of had before or after the presser (or even planning ahead) but I would have really loved to have seen something much more;
Stylized in terms of interviews with nice framing
Nice lighting
Good story line or arc
Good visuals from outside (or inside if possible I know that's next to impossible) where he spent 12 years in jail
File pictures from when he was in court on trial (if you could get access to that) taking us back to that dreadful time
Even hanging out with him at home showing good times, feeling and a state of mind
A hook that keeps me interest.

It jumped all over the place and I would of loved to have heard from the wrongly accused guy about what it felt like for 12 years knowing he should not have been there. Hearing about the emotional toll it took on him and his family, the determination of the students to work hard to free him.

Make me feel and on something like this and it all starts with what you really want to say and show about this, how you approach it, plan for it and focus on making it more than is.

Eric

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Peter Huoppi June 30, 2010, 7:10 a.m. permalink

As far a daily coverage of a press conference goes, this video did an adequate job. A few more cutaway shots, tight details of the audience and other media in the room, would have helped you avoid the camera moves and the sudden cut at 0:52.

But Eric is right: why should I care about this video? It doesn't tell me anything more than a text story would have. This kind of coverage is a necessary evil, particularly in the television world. But if I encountered this online, it would not hold my attention.

Eric's suggestion for other visuals outside the press conference are spot on. But this was your only opportunity, then find a way to build an emotional connection. Often, at the end of press conferences, you can pull people aside for one-on-ones. Ask the subject to describe his emotions, as Eric stated above. Ask one of the law students how it felt to work on a project like this. Ask the clinic director why this kind of work is important.

How does it make you feel?
Why is this important?
What does this mean to you, to people in general?

These are the questions that can build an emotional connection between viewer and subject.

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Kevin Wellenius June 30, 2010, 10 a.m. permalink

Eric and Peter already nailed the main points, so I'll hit a few details.

The audio levels between the speakers and the narration should not be so different.

There's a really good quote from Mr. Massey at 0:44 about the students doing a better job than the professional lawyers, but it's mangled by a sharp cut to something else. When you get a strong quote like that, give it a little time to sink in; don't rush right into the next clip.

You have an extended zoom and pan starting at 0:33 which is all over the place. The other scenes are generally steady and not distracting, though.

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